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pandabighead
06-10-2006, 18:02
a couple of pics from my first serious attempt at portraits
http://snap29.photobox.co.uk/4909112995798455a41560b3da9fbe77eebb8972ba36300695 624417.jpg
http://snap32.photobox.co.uk/2316742793556cfa3d6bca20e9821f6396c77fa0de27a1136c fa7092.jpg

more a chance to try and see if the post will work or not as my first seems to have went awry somewhere! but c&c welcome and thanks for looking
PBH
Gary Bagshawe
06-10-2006, 18:40
Not bad for a first attampt, in the second shot It may have worked a bit better had you kept the top of the models head in shot chin down a touch more and direct eye contact.
matty
06-10-2006, 21:04
images still not showing?
pandabighead
06-10-2006, 21:08
i can see them. can no one else?
thanks for the feedbak gary. understand what you are saying and will keep that in mind.
PBH
lee
06-10-2006, 21:10
I can see them :)
matty
06-10-2006, 21:10
no, the page takes an age to load then i get 2 red X
lee
06-10-2006, 21:15
they appear instantly for me Matty :shrug:
digitalfailure
06-10-2006, 21:16
Images show for me, it must be your wind up connection Matty.
matty
06-10-2006, 21:24
nup, not downloading for me, ive cleared cookies too..
Catdaddy
07-10-2006, 14:13
Fed the hamster and re-attached the drive belt? They're showing up for me no probs.
pandabighead
07-10-2006, 14:49
no comments or hints!
Catdaddy
07-10-2006, 20:54
Sorry, Panda! My impression of the first shot is that the crop is too tight - the pic 'feels' cramped to me. The light also looks a little direct. It might be better if it was done from the side as well. Just my 2p worth.

Agreeing with Gary about the eye contact in the 2nd pic - the smile doesn't seem to match the look in her eyes - not like in the first pic.
HIMUPNORTH
08-10-2006, 06:21
I will agree with Chris and Danny, which are composition issues that can easily be improved with a little practice (and now that we are digital more more shots). There is a good diagonal in #2 where the necklace follows the angle of head.

The lighting of the background in #2 is distracting. I am not sure what lighting was used but it appears to be "hot". There is also a shadow that does not benefit the picture so should be removed.

Good first attempts and if the model is handy (i.e. a relation) I would be asking her to pose again so you can work from a known point.
pandabighead
08-10-2006, 11:44
thanks for all that. a lot of good points there that i would not have picked up on.
the model is my wife and the lighting is portaflash continous lights "borrowed" from a project in work and set up at home so you can guess what we will be doing one weekend soon.