Joe, the first shoot tonight.

Paul Tomlinson · 30 Apr 2009

I took this portrait photo tonight and talking about a second shoot next week, i would like your thoughts and ideas on getting better shots next time.

Paul Tomo

Dave Stone · 30 Apr 2009

I'm no expert. But, I would say try a plane background and maybe a tighter crop so there isn't as much room above her head.

It's so easy to criticise other people work. Now I just have to try and get it right!

Nigey · 1 May 2009

I think you have captured her really well, her expression is really natural and fun. I would have to agree about the background though and it seems a tad underexposed? All in all though a really nice shot.

Paul Tomlinson · 1 May 2009

Cheers guys for the CC i should have done the crop in the first place, my next shoot with this model is on Tuesday night, i will put new photo's on next week. Many thanks for your help and thoughts.

Paul Tomo

Badger UK · 1 May 2009

You need to de-clutter a little and may be try to get some sort of catch-light in the eyes.

Mick · 1 May 2009

Check out the 1-2-3 rule for portraiture. Its quite a handy rule to use. No need to follow to the letter but it'll get you thinking.

Mick.

Kev M · 1 May 2009

The eyes look dead to me. Maybe because she's squinting or because the lights were in the wrong place to produce a catchlight.

r_enhy · 1 May 2009

Mick said:
Check out the 1-2-3 rule for portraiture. Its quite a handy rule to use. No need to follow to the letter but it'll get you thinking.

Mick.

I agree, I'd also ask your model to straighten her back, that should improve the pose as well.

As suggested a tighter crop, just head maybe would look good.

david1701 · 1 May 2009

I don't like the lighting much its very flat, how did you do it?

agree with the decluttering and the closer crop (but try LOADS of angles)

also whats the 1-2-3 rule?

fontmoss · 2 May 2009

also whats the 1-2-3 rule?

im also curious? focus recompose and em refocus?

Paul Tomlinson · 2 May 2009

Thanks for your comments folks, i should have said at the start that this shoot was not a shoot as such and what i mean is this was just a visit and a quick shot to have an idea to work on the next time we meet, that's when the shoot will be.
The light is from my 580 bouncing of the ceiling and without using a reflector to throw a little light back on to the face.

Sorry folk for not saying at he start but that you very much and thank again for looking and making comments.

Paul Tomo