Critique back to basics (New edit)

Fatheadedlizard · 15 May 2015

After fluffing my first outdoor family shoot, i'm going back to basics

This was done with a reflector to the right and and a big window left, the BG was blown a bit more than I wanted. I am dragging the kids out this weekend to find some locations and get a bit more practice in shooting outdoors

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sbowler579 · 19 May 2015

I like that Alan, maybe the eyes could be just a bit lower in the frame and possibley brighten a bit more to remove the hair a bit more.

I had a play and came up with this, will remove if required.

UaeExile · 19 May 2015

Sorry Alan, but it's a very awkward expression and her eyes look odd.

Fatheadedlizard · 19 May 2015

UaeExile said:
Sorry Alan, but it's a very awkward expression and her eyes look odd.

Thanks for commenting she was making monkey noises. Do you mean the edit has made her eyes look funny?

Fatheadedlizard · 19 May 2015

sbowler579 said:
I like that Alan, maybe the eyes could be just a bit lower in the frame and possibley brighten a bit more to remove the hair a bit more.

I had a play and came up with this, will remove if required.

Thanks Steve ill have another look at this one as its heavily cropped

My wife isn't keen on this one either

Fatheadedlizard · 19 May 2015

Colour edit, I think some of the issue is the shallow DOF it was 50mm @ 1.8 coupled with a slightly blown BG

Monkey 2 by Alan Cook, on Flickr

UaeExile · 19 May 2015

Fatheadedlizard said:
Thanks for commenting she was making monkey noises. Do you mean the edit has made her eyes look funny?

Yeah I think it did. Much prefer the colour!

Fatheadedlizard · 19 May 2015

Thanks Adam. I struggle with colour as I'm colour blind and don't have the confidence so think i'm being safe, but thanks for commenting it does help.

The23rdman · 19 May 2015

Great eyes, but watch your backgrounds. You have some funky stuff going on with the outlines around the heads and in the blown areas.

juggler · 22 May 2015

Nicely taken, but they're a bit close for me unless they're part of a series of closeups for a project or something. The effect is exacerbated by the 50mm lens. Again, if deliberate then that's fine, but it's not the most flattering focal length for this kind of work.