Critique Berlin on film

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Charlotte
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I know we don't usually get film shots in here, but I'd love some feedback on a couple of my Berlin shots! Velvia 50, on an Olympus XA4 that's older than I am.

Going for dark and moody with this one, I like the negative space on the left but not sure if it works?
Velvia XA4-4
by Charlotte Davis, on Flickr

Graffiti and empty cans, taken on a tour.
Velvia XA4-7
by Charlotte Davis, on Flickr

Berlin TV Tower
Velvia XA4-8
by Charlotte Davis, on Flickr
 
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1) I keep wondering what's further round to the right. The shot works, but feels like it could be stronger if you were just a little further left and then panned so that the left hand lights were just inside the edge of the image.
2) A good idea, but it feels like the background to the rubbish is 'unsatisfying' and the light is dull.
3) Classic tower shot, good light. (y)

HTH
 
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You're welcome. I wish people would crit my stuff more (although it's nice to be told 'great shot') and it only seems right to do the same for others.
 
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John
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the last one was in East Berlin when I was posted to West Berlin 88/90

your 2nd sums up Berlin these days from what I've been told its a dirty place,

liked 2 & 3 think you got dark and moody for the 1st
 
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the last one was in East Berlin when I was posted to West Berlin 88/90

your 2nd sums up Berlin these days from what I've been told its a dirty place,

liked 2 & 3 think you got dark and moody for the 1st
Thanks for the feedback! Berlin was actually really clean - the cans here were left on purpose, I think. It was in the back of a car park, the rest of Berlin was quite clean (much more so than London at least).
 
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