The original is way better - the edit has made her skin greyish and blotchy. I think you've pulled the highlights down too far.
That's the wonderful thing about offering alternatives, Ideally the original wouldn't have areas containing nothing but white. I'm simply offering something at the other end of the spectrum and maybe the ideal sits somewhere in between. Or maybe just have it exposed without the burnout.
Had the file have been a workable size I could have spent a bit of time with a couple of layers and kept the original light levels as are where they don't burn out to nothing. As with any offering of advice here, the OP is totally free to grasp what's offered or disregard as they see fit.
What is great is that these things get talked about and then something can be gained in one form or other. The most important thing is to at least appreciate that someone has taken time out of their busy day to look and respond when that's what the OP was seeking when they post something for critique.
I dare say that images look slightly different viewed on each person's monitor/equipment in general. We all have our own tastes in respect of what the ideal exposure is and just to make it all a little more funky, we can all be creative and deliberately step outside the expected norm and create images which don't fit the ideals of many folk.
I'm not really seeing the whole greyness vibe personally, I do see a drop off in respect of the light intensity and greater definition of the variance in the natural skin tones in the edit albeit with less pop. So obviously we are seeing different things, which is truly a joy to behold.
A contrary opinion, debate, adjustment and subsequent agreement reached through an acceptable level of compromise between parties is pretty much why we've not blown ourselves off the face of the planet, or beaten each other to to a pulp with various weaponry at our disposal.
It's also how we share and learn. What more could a person wish for when trying to further themselves in a pursuit which they enjoy.
Happy days all round.
Regards
Tim