There's some excellent stuff there, but seeing as how you're a professional, this FWIW from a retired professional wedding photographer myself
#1 Been there, done that, felt the frustration. There's a lovely picture there, but that's not it: the light on them is great, the expressions are OK, but the picture doesn't work. Why? Because when you look at that picture you see the light, the expressions, the moment. Everybody else sees them small in the frame, surrounded by seriously distracting clutter.
#2 Maybe a little too much tilt up considering the sky's not all that exciting
#3 Fine
#4 A cracking good shot
#5 IMO it simply doesn't work. With a macro lens it might have done, but even then ... why bother? How disappointed do you reckon your customers would be without an unexciting picture of their rings? And besides, how weird is it that some wedding photographers feel obliged to take the couples' rings away to do what amounts to a pack shot of them, thereby missing interesting stuff going on meanwhile?
#6 A fair enough attempt at a British Standard Getting Ready Picture, but it looks set up (not saying it is, just that it looks like it is). I bet as you get more experience, you'll find yourself getting in more with a shorter focal length to get some dynamic into the shot.
#7 I'm not sure about the composition. She's sharper than the reflection is so she needs to be dominant in the frame, and it's not obvious to me how you could arrange that after you've taken it.
#8 Safe, but wasn't really going to work because the bouquet's the same tones as the background, which isn't OOF enough to make the bouquet stand out from it
#9 -11 are well caught, as is 13 (but I bet you wish you's leaned a tad to your left!)
#12 framing's nice but you just missed the moment. Tell her not to use the tissue next time she does that ...
#14 - 17 yep, what's not to like?
#18 for my money it's cropped a bit too wide, but whatever
#19 a bit too much foreground - and your white balance looks a bit off on that one to me
#20 something doesn't quite work as well as it could with that one, but you'd need a trad snapper to say how you could have improved it.
#21 - 22 nicely caught
#23 I don't think that works at all as it is, but it might with a tighter crop
#24 I reckon if you'd got in close with a shorter focal length and got some dynamic into it, that would have been a little gem
So, not a lot wrong there IMO. You must have worked your socks off at that gig to get the range of shots, and it was worth it because I'm sure they'll be dead chuffed with their snaps.
I'm well impressed by how you're trying to cover all bases from documentary to trad and you're succeeding, but I'm wondering about two things. Did you shoot that one using primes? And are you not a fan of wide angle lenses, or is it just that you don't feel all that confident getting in closer to the action at times?
