OK, FWIW ...
#17 - Imaginative, nicely done and a pleasant change from the usual pack shot of the shoes. But - beware the bride who very much wants a picture of The Shoes. That bride will want just that - a pack shot of the shoes, in which the maker's name is clearly visible if she spent a
lot of money on them, but in which the maker's name isn't visible at all if she didn't. Your customer will hopefully be highly chuffed with this shot, but it's very easy for a newbie wedding snapper to get carried away with his or her ideas for a "different" shoes shot and thereby lose the plot.
#31 - Well seen and caught. It wouldn't have worked if the hairdresser's arm and hand with those tongs wasn't where it is, and with more experience you'd have kept that jug of orange juice out the shot. Proof if any were needed that you can break the "rules" and still get a picture that works.
#99 - Again, well seen and well caught. Ideally you'd have shot this from more to your right in order to avoid the unflattering treatment of the bride's neck/chin and get more of her face in, but stuff like this only comes from experience.
#125 - Is nice enough for what it is. The problem with shots like this though is that only you and the bride know what that's a picture of. Any potential customer will wonder why that bride is standing in front of graffiti/a mural looking bored/pensive or whatever.
#219 - That's as good as you've any right to expect shooting from where you were, given that they recessed the wrong way round. Assuming that she then turned to her left and they walked towards you, did you get anything worthwhile before they were past you?
#270 - Sure, I could nit-pick about the framing, but they'll love it. With plain and simple shots like this, there's a lot to be said for rattling off three in quick succession, framing them left, centre then right to give yourself options
#289 - I'm not keen on the crop or the conversion, but more importantly, even if the bride's cool with the partly-open mouth, not many potential customers would be.
#290 -
Lots better
#378 - I'm guessing that the primary set this up? Whatever, her expression kills this one. In fact both of them are off, simply because your timing's out. Again, as you get more experience, you'll get better at avoiding "in-between" expressions.
#426 - What's not to like about this one? If you were stuck where you were, I don't see how you could have done any better.
#438 - OK, you could have framed it lower to get the bouquets in, but it works perfectly well as it is, simply because of that background.
#479 - If you have to shoot along the top table like that, you always want the bride to be on your side of the speaker. Then you don't have the problems you did with this one.
#488 - The woman featured may well be OK with that shot when she sees it, but ffs
never put any shot on your website for potential customers to see if somebody in it has an unflattering expression. I'd actually bin this one.
#520 - Again, I could nit-pick but what for? It's fine as it is, considering.
#558 - My problems with this one are the disparate expressions (hers also being somewhat unflattering) and the disembodied hands. It always looks better in a posed snap if hands are seen to be connected to something. Like a wrist ...
#578 - And this last one's a reject AFAIC. It has nothing going for it.
So ... not at all a bad showing for a first paid second gig. Just get as much experience as you can now, but don't expect it all to come together for a while yet
HTH a bit.