To be honest as already stated it needs levelling, would have also been better if it had been shot earlier in the evening, it would have helped to balance out the scene and add a little ambient light which would have made the sodium yellow less on an issue...
Setting wise and focus etc all look good but I have to say the location isn't great, I know from seeing the different views from that area in the past that there are some fantastic spots for light trails around there but this particular position would have been far better if you had gone for a central composition IMO
Matt