Much better imo
Its actually a little
overly softened for my tastes ... go on scream at me ... you know you want to!
I find the processing is kinder to the model on this one, perhaps bring back a little sharpness to the eye... though not too much if youre going for the dreamy effect.
The pose and the lighting look lovely and youre definately showing off her beauty here, Im sure she'd love this.
Nice one!