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My name is Francesca Morrison; I am 18 years old from Scotland.

I have been interested in photography for many years. I have been to many shows through out the west of Scotland including: Rowallan Activity centre, Ingliston Equestrian Centre and Scottish Home Pony. I first became into photography when I got my Olympus camera and took many photos of my pony in the field and stable, And from then on going to shows with my friend and developing my skills. My aim is to capture the heart and relationship between horse and rider: including portraits or ridden photographs. My aim is to become an event photographer around the uk.

If you have any questions contact me via email or phone:
 
What is it for? CV? job application? web site?

Do you want it in first person?

There are a couple of punctuation and grammar errors and I wouldnt phrase things like that, but tell us how you are going to use it and I'll give you my version.

Oh - and I wouldnt leave my phone and email on a forum.
 
From a quick read through there are a few grammar issues. You have "My aim is..." twice with two different aims. Have you tried reading out loud to yourself? There are a few bits there that don't sound right to me...

It might also be a good idea to keep all your posts about your website on one thread, it will make it easier for people to follow...
 
I take it this is different to what you were asking for yesterday?
 
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