In my opinion...............the eyes should be the point of focus, I also feel that the DOF is too shallow.In plain English,I don`t like it.
But I ain`t no expert.
Sorry.
It's pretty close though, focus on the eyes, increase the aperture slightly, loose the ball and slacken the crop, and a good shot!!!
Cute dog none the less!
Or just take a different shot completely..........
Well obviously...but sticking to the rules and trying the same shot again?