I too am all for black blacks and bags of contrast, but this is OTT for me too. Anyhow, FWIW and speaking only as a retired wedding photographer ...
#1 The potential is well seen, but to make the most of it, we needed to swop the door on the right for more of a view into the room (i.e. the "in here" referred to in the note).
#2 Doesn't work at all for me because it's all black blobs. Why weren't you shooting
with the light rather than against it e.g. from over by that cushion?
#3 The picture is about that girl's reaction to what the slap artist's doing. There was a killer picture to be had there if you'd moved to your right and shot between the bride and the slap artist.
#4 Is he really doing up his flies?
#5 Nice enough, but I'd clone out those light tones behind his right shoulder.
#6 Nice enough again for what it is, but wouldn't that have been a great picture if the groom was standing exactly like t'other bloke and had a similar expression?
#7 Isn't that ▲ the picture?
#8 OK despite the fact that he
looks like he has his eyes shut.
#9 Fair enough for what it is.
#10 That seems well enough done to me, but I don't feel qualified to comment beyond that as posed shots of this type were never my thing.
#11 A real shame there's that much of a gap between them, but well caught.
#12 Nice. Next time you get a top table with table names, bottles or anything easily moveable in front of the main characters, nip over
just before the first speech and remove it/them so you have more chance of more clear shots, explaining why as you do so
#13 Meh. In my experience, shots like this of the "here's the guests having a great time at this wedding" type rarely work unless (a) the people are packed together, (b) you can get some height and (c) you wait and/or pick your position so you have faces in the foreground rather than backs. We nearly always found that close candids of animated couples/small groups of folk convey the feel of drinks/chillout time far better than any half-baked general view of nothing much happening.
#14 Not a shot I would have taken so I'm not qualified to comment - despite which I have to ask does it not bother you that they seem to be joined at the nose?
HTH a bit