Sticky bud

I think that he means that the image overall is cluttered and somewhat indeterminate. If you want to draw (a viewer's) attention to something that you saw and recognised, then you have to make that explicit in the frame, maybe by going in hard upon it, or using the light and focus or whatever method comes to hand.

The viewer's attention here is diffuse, and that's a result of your poor orchestration of the scene. It's not that huge a step to get to where you should be going with this. You have to step outside yourself, though, and think more explicitly in terms of what a stranger might see.

I think that I see what you saw and felt, but you need to tutor yourself more about how to communicate this.
 
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