It's about a gazillion times better than my early attempts. It's sharp, well framed and nicely exposed, and it has a bit of movement in it.
The processing of the mouth and eyes is a little odd and draws attention to a slightly blank expression. The pose is rather square on and the lighting is a bit flat and featureless for my taste.
I'd like to see what it would look like with just the camera left light - and with that positioned a little higher.