Joe,
Welcome to the mad house!
Sorry Ive missed your first few shots, but here goes.
Record - Great DoF, great angle, and you have a good eye for a shot. The green is a distraction, and a tighter crop would sort that out. The point of focus, although easy enough to find, could do with a point of interest on it. An example might be a finger pressing down on that key. It would also add texture, and another lead in line (which you have grasped well
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Overall, well shot!
Work - As others have said, the bg is busy, and the point of focus doesn't leap out as work. But that said it is on the right track. A bit more concentration on the rule of thirds, and what is going on in the bg would nail this!
Blur - Shot 1 doesn't work for me. No point of interest, distracting bg, nothing leading me into the shot, and too symmetrical.
Blur - Shot 2
Dead space is so often avoided, but in this case it really adds to the shot! The ring is in the right place, the contrast between colour and motion all work. Well done.
Time - This is an "almost there" shot for me. The road is tilted which is a bit off putting. Good lead in lines though. The sky is fine (maybe a tad darker) but as others have said, Black sky wouldn't have any interest in it. I think it is a bit noisy, but then it was a looooooooooooooong exposure, so that can be forgiven. Overall though, I think there is "something" missing, and I can't think what it is... sorry
Mix - Sorry, but it is over exposed, with a lot blown. It also lacks the composition that you have clearly shown in all your other photos. It is certainly an interesting subject though.
Fun - A great shot that just shouts FUN!!!
Great colours and a fantastic expression. The top right is distracting however, and it is worth trying to remember to look at the whole of the image when shooting.
Mix retake - I like this. It works other than the top of the shot where there is no Smarties. Just crop a bit tighter, and thats a keeper!
Hope this helps
Kind rgds
Adie
